To me, the fact that it exhibits various telltale signs of LLMism is not the main problem; it is annoying mostly due to personal preference, just like I am annoyed by the writing style of some authors from the 19th century.
The main problem is that LLM writing inevitably slips in nonsensical phrases and sentences that are plausible but, upon inspection, turn out to be dilutions at best and deceptions at worst. They are such non-sequiturs that it is indefensible to consider them the crystallized results of a logical thought process, so I greatly dislike them regardless of authorship, and so far, it has been mostly LLMs that produce them. However, this is not a new thing, as Orwell put it from 1946:
> the slovenliness of our language makes it easier for us to have foolish thoughts [...] Modern English, especially written English, is full of bad habits which spread by imitation and which can be avoided if one is willing to take the necessary trouble. If one gets rid of these habits one can think more clearly, and to think clearly is a necessary first step toward political regeneration: so that the fight against bad English is not frivolous and is not the exclusive concern of professional writers.
Here are some examples from this article, which I am listing with the sole hope to elicit the same concern of frivolous writing from readers, not as any an attack on the author of this piece:
> The 1955 trade was the system already past its own decision point, picking up the pieces. The blunder happened five years earlier. [...] Everything after, [...], was the system mechanically playing out the consequences of the June 1950 decision.
What is "the system" here? The US government, the FBI, or just a vague blob of fate and the passage of time? What exact had this system been doing that counts as "picking up the pieces"? What was exactly mechanical about the events between 1950 and 1955?
> He later recalled in characteristically dry phrasing that "many of the officers in the U.S. Army in missiles and rockets were students in this program".
Is the quote really especially dry? Is this purported dryness a part of Qian's character? If yes, then we sue did not see it elsewhere.
> The hierarchy in the interrogation room was not what casual U.S.-narrative framings would assume.
What is even "casual US-narrative framings"?
> The Jiang family connection is structurally important, and the 1955 PRC-side claim that Qian was a long-standing Communist sympathiser is structurally implausible because his wife was the daughter of a senior Kuomintang figure
What do "structurally important" and "structurally implausible" mean here? What is the big structure that this connection played an important role in?
> This was the public peak.
The peak of his publicity I guess. The public peak is in Nepal.
> He was, on the public record at that exact moment, one of the leading American aerospace scientists. He was not a junior researcher who could be replaced.
Who read till this point would need this clarification that he was an expendable junior researcher?
> They are produced by a sequence of external shocks that hardens the U.S. political environment around him in the eighteen months before his clearance is revoked.
(Minor but somehow this sentence is in present tense.)
> His later assessment of the trade was accurate pricing made in real time by an official with the position to assess it, though he was reading the wrong decision.
"accurate pricing" as metaphor for "accurate assessment"?
> The imprisonment was the trade's cause, not the trade.
The trade was not the trade's cause, or the imprisonment was not the trade, or something else?
> The Soviets were trying to slow the propagation of capability that had already been absorbed
If the knowledge had already been absorbed, what use is withdrawing the blueprints? The conclusion that the Soviets must have thought the Chinese could become independent because they took the materials away is quite dubious.
> the capability foundation was laid
What does "capability foundation" mean?
> The doctrine is the kill-first-from-distance-using-superior-detection-and-networked-sensors-and-long-range-missiles doctrine that Qian outlined in the Toward New Horizons volume on the launching of a winged missile for supersonic flight.
No mention of the doctrine prior to this sentence, while the next sentence says that the aformentioned PL-15 embodies that doctrine. Could it have just been written as one sentence?
> the structural threat to U.S. naval power projection
"structural" here we go again
> The same pattern is visible at every other layer of the strategic-technology spectrum in 2026.
No mention of any pattern prior to this point, except the vague development of China war capability.
> This is what compounding looks like when you imprison the carrier you needed to retain
Does this event have that many precedents that it deserves to be written down as an aphorism?
> That chain was the thing that walked out the door. The methodology is what the chain was running on
I honestly don't know what chain and methodology here refer to, much less whether the metaphor is sensible.
> The dimension of the transfer that has no Soviet equivalent and no Western parallel is this one.
"The dimension of the transfer"?
> structural features
"structural"
> multi-disciplinary integration across specialties
"multi-disciplinary" = "across specialties"
> The methodology was specifically Western, specifically von Kármán-lineage, and specifically transferable through a single carrier
What does "specifically" even mean when it applies to 3 things at once?
> The fact that he was available to be that carrier was a function of the Boxer Indemnity Scholarship program, von Kármán's recruitment decisions at Caltech, the wartime mobilisation that placed him at the centre of the U.S. air-power apparatus, and the Red Scare architecture that produced his imprisonment. The full chain had to operate. Removing any link in it produces a different outcome.
A lot to say "changing the past affects the future".
> Wang Huning, who became Xi Jinping's chief ideologist, sits in a tradition that runs directly through Qian's cybernetic-systems-engineering work, and the methodology runs into Chinese state-planning architecture along that lineage
What is this "tradition", and what is that "lineage" exactly?
> The way I read it
A subjective thought! A cause for celebration.
> paired with Chen Yun's 摸着石头过河 as the operational sidekick.
"operational sidekick"?
> The same machinery, operating on essentially the same evidentiary basis, produced bounded internal exile for Oppenheimer and unbounded external transfer for Qian
"bounded" and "unbounded" here mean nothing, as both are bounded by the Earth size? What is even the point of talking about geographical difference when the political difference is of dominant interest here?
> structural dynamic
> moral architecture
...
> The Oppenheimer-Qian-Japan triangle reveals the same pattern repeatedly.
Finding these supposedly aforementioned "pattern"s is like finding Waldo.
> structural rights barriers
> US self-conception
> threat-detection regime
> consequence space
> methodological irony
> structural feature
> structural reading