If you're new to HPMOR, don't read this. Instead, go to http://hpmor.com/chapter/1 and scroll down to "Every inch of wall space is covered by a bookcase."
Reading just a bit, the constant "science!" is really off putting and I'm only half the chapter in. Just reading this [0] makes me want to close the tab. Is it this obvious and in the face throughout the whole 'book'?
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> "Mum," Harry said. "If you want to win this argument with Dad, look in chapter two of the first book of the Feynman Lectures on Physics. There's a quote there about how philosophers say a great deal about what science absolutely requires, and it is all wrong, because the only rule in science is that the final arbiter is observation - that you just have to look at the world and report what you see. Um... off the top of my head I can't think of where to find something about how it's an ideal of science to settle things by experiment instead of arguments -"
If you're into audiobooks, don't miss the podcast: http://www.hpmorpodcast.com -- It is excellently read by multiple voices.
You can find editors for hire online. Some of them are very good.
Of course, they won't be JKR or JKR's editors. They'll be ordinary professionals with a professional opinion.
I suspect that may be enough to put the author off.
I also suspect that JKR has glanced at this already. But since she's known for taking political positions rather different to the author's, I doubt first contact would be a happy experience.
You need to contact JKR to know what to tell the editor (is she offended by the many criticisms of canon? the occasional political comments eg on immigration? the notorious Draco rape bit? and so on); bonus points if the editor is trusted and can help make the deal work.
You're not editing at this point, you're asking for official approval, which is a whole other thing.
You're not going to get that from JKR, or from any other high-profile author who has a professional interest in keeping their own work separate from the vast flood of fanfic that surrounds it.
But also - it's simply stupid (and irrational) to think that JKR is going to approve of political comments about immigration, or a rape scene.
She's made her political position very obvious in interviews. Why would she change it for some fanfic?
It's like trying to tell Steve Jobs that he should have made Macs run Windows, because OS X was a dumb mistake.
> You're not editing at this point, you're asking for official approval, which is a whole other thing.
Official approval would almost certainly require changes, hence the need for an editor after starting any sort of negotiation. The editor is part of any deal going through. No one expects that there's even the slightest chance that MoR would be approved with no changes; there is a tiny iota of a chance that after appropriate changes are made. What is 'appropriate'? No idea. So hiring an editor before is not nearly as useful as hiring after.
> But also - it's simply stupid (and irrational) to think that JKR is going to approve of political comments about immigration, or a rape scene.
You're very opinionated for an ignorant fool. I never said it was a rape scene, and I doubt Rowling would object to the immigration part.
It's quite common for authors that achieve critical success. Stephan King even went back and published one of his older books with the material the big bad editors and publishers made him take out. Let's not even talk about Robert Jordan.
Even his detractors [0] call HPMOR a "cracking good read".