Do you think it achieves that purpose?
Do you think it achieves that purpose?
Looking at it as sales/marketing copy though I'd say that your biggest competitor by far isn't people not understanding what it is but people thinking "Why don't I just change my site and see what happens?"
In that context I'd guess this story telling format is perfect for taking a concept like 'prevent acceptance of false hypotheses by controlling for external variation through randomized trials' and turning it into a visceral "Oh fuck. That's painful!" moment your target market can relate to.
Seriously, I think you make a great point of selling your service. I also think you gloss over things like cyclic variations -- but I'm not sure it's your job to educate people in the subtle art of fact oriented market research (or what one should call it).
For those that don't have the time to learn, changing it probably wouldn't matter. For those that do -- chances are they probably will find it out from a more comprehensive resource (like, say, a good book).
Can you suggest one?
Coming to your suggestion, do you have a good book/website in mind?