This is relevant to writing fiction or non-fiction as well.
For example, I didn't like this, so I commented out:
>though his companions jogged just behind him, he would have barely seen them at all had he look. They ran, with their heads down, attentive only to their feet slapping the muddy earth, tracking the path they followed, their breath ragged.
and wrote this, using the commented-out text as a reference:
The fog was now so dense that he could see nothing ahead of him. He ran with his head down, breath ragged, attentive only to his feet slapping the muddy earth, tracking their path. His companions followed close behind.