I am confused about "Splinch Pro" - is there going to be a non-pro version? If not, perhaps it's worth removing that distinction.

As for your pricing, is it based on research? Corporate IT is one of those magical environments where sometimes more is more - ie, your service won't be taken seriously if it's priced too low.

I think it would be worth your time creating a second page with more details. I don't know what "collaborative maintenance" means, nor "community extendable", so having some more information would be helpful. Specifically, I would point out the advantages of your service over the existing approaches. Keep in mind this won't just be read by network admins, but by non-technical managers to whom the benefits may not be immediately obvious.