As a writer, I disagree with the excuse 'Its an essay it is supposed to prove a point'.

There was no 'Hook' in the first 5-7 paragraphs, heck I couldnt really tell what the point of the article was.

This IMO was a poorly written article. I thought the points that were made were real, but didnt go back to whatever the heck the main point was.

Wonder who's kid the author is.