Hmm. Upon reading your post I'd say that you need to further tweak your grammar and choice of words.

- The placement of your commas is often incorrect.

- "I didn't reach" should be "I haven't reached".

- "The hard point is.." should probably be "The hard part is" etc...

So three things to work on:

- Grammer, especially the placement of commas - when to pause in a statement.

- Use of correct choice of words - this will come from more practice.

And finally: - Try listening to more rock / alternative music. For the first few years, it will mostly sound like gibberish. This is partially an exercise to train your ear =)