I'm not sure I quite expected to see this on HN, though I'm glad it was posted since I happen to be trying to learn novel writing. I thought the before and after example of the basketball article was a concise and clear way to explain over-writing. The second version was clearer, more accessible, less obnoxious and no less informative and narrative. A series of poetry and short fiction teachers in college helped me become self-aware about this bad habit. I still make the mistake consistently, but I have learned to either catch it or agree with the suggestions of my peers who catch it when I don't.

I personally believe that programmers can learn from poets, for example. Write constantly. Read the work of others, both critically and for enjoyment. Writing is the sexy part, but revising is at least as important a task.