Show HN: SuperTrip
supertripgame.com
supertripgame.com
1. "supertrip" – what is this? drugs? roadtrip? backpacking?
2. 'not your typical adventure' - well that's a waste of a subheader, doesn't tell me anything. Bad first impression.
3. 'not for the faint of heart' still nothing. You could cut this sentence out and literally lose nothing. You're wasting precious seconds of attention here.
4. 'you and your friends will travel to locations you never thought were there... ah! So it's a sort of real-life waypoint driven amazing-race type thingy.
5. 'choose how many waypoints, how long a game, race or go as a group...' ah, that actually sounds like an amusing way to kill an afternoon with some friends.
You're completely burying the lead there, friend. Kill 2 and 3, and lead with 4 and 5. Uber says "everyone's personal driver", not "not your typical journey" or "not for the outdated commuter" or something like that. You have precious seconds of attention. Don't tell us what your product isn't. Tell us IMMEDIATELY what we can expect to do, and what the benefit is.
Cheers
However it's completely understandable if you didn't read it. So again, sorry about that!
I tried to watch the video to understand, but again, I'm not sure I get it.
I looked for a summary, but the only concrete information is "The goal of the game is to reach all the destinations."
It seems like a treasure map via AR...is that right?
It's a class 9 RTM for Olympus in the UK (which clashes with what you're doing) FYI.
I'm not an IP lawyer and this isn't legal advice.
Also, I think your video would be better placed higher up the page: I had to scroll a long way to get to it.
When you talk about "adventure", I think the general consumer associates that with brands like REI, Patagonia, North Face, Cabela's, et al. Perhaps this is my own personal bias speaking but my gut says otherwise. Lastly, if I was in the military sacrificing my life to protect SuperTrip, I'd probably throw a fit about the "true heroes" phrase too. Is this app going to jump on a bomb for me?
My advice would be to pick a market segment and laser focus on it and then grow from there (or pivot). Maybe it is "adventurers", in which case you need to ditch the urban scenery.
I'm just a one man team (aside from contractors) with some marketing experience but am still definitely learning so I need all the feedback I can get. Thanks :)