You thought it looked weird too? :) Does that mean it's just a copy & paste from somewhere else?
It's better now, of course, but it still feels like too much text.
Without prejudice to your rights under applicable data protection or privacy law, Stormweight Systems Inc may amend this Privacy Policy from time-to-time. We will notify you of such amendments or changes by updating the Last Updated date at the top of this Privacy Policy.
You will notify me by updating a date on your website? Sounds a bit passive for a "notification" :)
The problem with legalese is that it never really tells a normal person anything. It's an impenetrable wall of text which no one wants to read, but possibly should, in case it contains some outrageous evil to which you'd end up agreeing.
That's why I want to avoid it when I get my own stuff out there. Since I'm not planning to do anything evil, I don't need to distract & confuse anyone with legalese.
And since I don't live in the US, I don't have to use legalese to cover my ass from ridiculous lawsuits either :p