Ask HN: PR – How does it work...

Hey there HN!

I've been running a startup (http://subservice.co) for a little while now and we've worked out what we need to do to take it to the next level.

I've sought some advice, and copied other press article's writing styles, and come up with this press release - http://d.pr/f/gQ5t.

But I'm certain I can still make it way better. Do you know of any good resources or friendly publicists that could help me out?

Thanks in advance!