So here it is!! http://fast-basin-9051.herokuapp.com
Honest opinion please and where can I improve upon I need to get good grade on this one.
1) Lose the iPhone 3g picture. You need to be up to date on that. It should be an iPhone 5 or newer Android smartphone.
2) Lots of little grammar issues:
- "Providing Realtime Advertising Data by Analyzing Pictures, in a blink of an eye"
You're switching between capitalizing the headline and then not at the end -- should be either:
Providing Realtime Advertising Data by Analyzing Pictures, In the Blink of an Eye
Or
Providing real-time advertising data by analyzing pictures in the blink of an eye.
-"Many companies pay alot of money" vs. "Many companies pay a lot of money". Although, I would change this to say something like, budgets for mobile advertisement are expected to grow X% over the next 2 years. Or something like that. The current statement comes off as "I've heard that some people spend a lot of money, so we're planning on selling things to them." It sounds like a rookie.
-"Many companies loose alot of valuable customers" vs. "Many companies lose a lot of valuable customers". Even here I would stick to X% of customers are lost because...
-And thats where PictAlyze. Should be "that's where PictAlyze"
3) Site organization could use some work. It would look much better if you stuck with 2 columns and rotated between a picture and a section of text opposite the picture on the column next to the image.
Body should elaborate on that without requiring further clicking. URL should be clickable.
The audience doesn't need a FAQ explaining what a FAQ is (and giving no information about the page's subject).
Menus should work.
Typos galore.
The basic concept of the product is interesting, assuming I'm right in assuming it processes pictures for identifiable advertising content and reports that metadata. What's the source of the pictures? live feed from Google Glass? deliberate pictures from iPhones? does it (as I'd expect) mine a large collection of photos? Sends mined metadata off to what services? Who would actually run this thing? seems it would be most useful running on consumer photo streams, but why would the consumer download & run this app? Are there privacy controls?
The page indicates the product runs on mobile devices, but seems the real use would be on "big iron" image server farms: leveraging anonymous photos, process billions of images for large-scale mining. Where does the program/process run?
Seems the page is a whipped-up "v0.1 alpha" advertising page for an algorithm in need of a business model.
- Lots of typos and broken english.
- FAQ is useless.
- Hard to figure out what the described app does.
- "proved to be a ground breaking tool"? Citation needed.
- What's the point of sending image metadata to the advertisers?