Lawdingo: A Funny Ad For a Serious Business
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If you guys make more and they catch some attention/traction, it can perhaps be an excellent marketing campaign :)
I especially liked that the "description of a legal problem" featured in the ad was "I hate my wife".
I don't know if it was the amateur production quality or the actors that seemed to be some college kids eager to get back to their frat house, but the whole thing had a local car dealer quality to me.
There's a reason professional ad agencies get paid for what they do.
You're absolutely right, it is extremely hard to do this kind of thing. Which is why we pay agencies instead of trying to do it ourselves, unless we want to be in the same league as Crazy Al's House of Chryslers.
And it's not quite "I am on a horse" memorable, but I think they'll get their money's worth from this.
For any tech startup with a limited budget I found it extremely impressive.
To me, it just made them come across like they're not very serious, even a little juvenile. And I'd expect anyone in genuine need of a lawyer to find it conflicting to their emotional state. I guess if it was genuinely funny I probably wouldn't feel this way. Falling slightly flat just makes the negatives much more obvious.
The service sounds like a very good idea and I'm sure it will get off to a good start. But this sort of thing works better for less important things, like razors. I wouldn't expect a mainstream crowd to respond to it particularly well.
Maybe I just no that by the video cus it's just tried a bit too hard to be funny. Plus, the memorable points for the video were some guys drinking tea not why I should care about the product. I took me a visit to the site to figure out what they meant by claiming to have Lawdingo.
Edit: To sound a bit more positive (sorry) I should mention I did like this line
"One reputable source declared it “the way of the future,” and we’re not about to argue with ourselves."
Just because something can be identified as having certain qualities doesn't mean that it can be improved by forsaking those qualities. "Defendant? How about DeFUNdant?"
:P
But, I do believe their money (however little it was) could've been better spent addressing the legitimate concerns you raise more directly and communicating why one with serious legal issues should consider their service.
I think that people do have a hard time trying to figure out how to locate and retain an attorney, etc. Anyone who has ever needed one can relate. So, connecting with that could have immediate appeal to someone who's been there or may well be there now (i.e. their audience). The rest of it was a bit distracting from that very important message.
Anyway, good luck to the Lawdingo founder(s) and team.
1) If you can't get top-notch talent, just do the ad yourself.
Why? You can tell when amateur actors are just "reading lines." They don't seem excited about the product, all they want to do is get through the script. The had has some brilliant ideas (the best friend cheating on your wife bit is quite funny) but the execution kills it.
If you don't think you can pull off "acting" by yourself, even describing your business (like you do when trying to get into YC, for example) will go a lot farther than amateur actors reading off of a script. Something like "Hi, I'm Jim and this is what Lawdingo does. I'm excited to introduce you to this new blah blah" simply shows excitement (bonus points for being the co-/founder -- viewers get a warmer feeling).
2) If you really want to go the funny route (I don't think I would), do something ridiculous.
An 80s eras commercial, a song-and-dance; something that has the possibility of going viral. Law advice is a relatively ubiquitous subject. Consider how GEIKO sells insurance. In your case, I'd say you went half-GEIKO. Go full-GEIKO. Be ridiculous if you want to be funny. The ad makes you seem sorta-kinda serious, so I can't help but get mixed feelings.
If you want to see what a great example of the above is, consider: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZUG9qYTJMsI
3) Diction. Diction. Diction. Have some. Or your actors should have some.
I remember we paid this one chick god knows how much to shoot an ad for us (sex appeal, etc. -- another dumb idea). I wrote the damn script and I could barely understand what the fuck she was saying. The indian dude has no diction. If that's you, I'm sorry, but that's the truth. Take a speech class or get someone else to do it. As your grandma always used to say: E N U N C I A T E (or at least mine did).
4) The fist-bump at the end is lame. Seriously.
The ending of an add should be the equivalent of the ending of a symphony: loud, fanciful, memorable.
I thought it was in tune with the whole "awkward hug/handshake" thing in how they botched the fist bump as well.
I think a comic panic reaction would have worked better, begging him to "get a real lawyer, don't use them guys" or something silly. Giving the impression that you guys are better than just going the traditional route, and more scary for the other guy.