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What do you think about the launchpage of my startup?

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7 pointsmiddleman9015 comments

Get some editing help on the copy - it's got some seriously awkward phrasing. Also, I've read it three times, and I'm still not sure what it is that your company will do aside from "reinventing the world of coupons". If your value proposition is that users won't have to "pay for a coupon to receive a discount", you need some more explaining - I don't know what that means, but I'm pretty sure I haven't done it (and hence wouldn't be motivated to sign up).

Vaguely related: how should I be pronouncing the name? Is it two words ("vou-share"), or a creative spelling of voucher to put the word "share" in there?

>I don't know what that means, but I'm pretty sure I haven't done it

I suspect it's a daily deals site that doesn't charge. Groupon that's free for consumers.

I completely agree with your remarks on the copy, it doesn't read like it was written by a native English speaker. Should be an easy fix.

"We are reinventing the world of coupons."

Whoa, that's two of my "literary" pet peeves right there :(

"world of" when it doesn't even apply and should be left out (it's just like "nothing short of", such stuff can be chained forever without adding one iota of meaning to a sentence)

"reinvent" when you actually mean "improve".

Since that's all the info you're really given, this doesn't work for me, at all.

To be slightly more constructive.. though I'm not sure what exactly you are planning to do, making coupons more useful, or less of a pain to deal with, is a good thing, right?

It's just that overselling something with too grand language can really backfire, it does on me in this case; combined with no real hard info it feels like giving your email address for a cat in the bag. All I know about that cat is that it likes marketing and coupons.

Why not just say "here's what we intend to do and how we'll do it, this is how you can stay informed / in touch"?

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It doesn't work without JavaScript.

Lots of things don't work without JavaScript.

I think it looks great. No scrolling!

am i missing something here?

i dont see any reason to make a simple 3 container page javascript dependent.

And even if you make a site that requires js to be functional you at least put a fallback in there.

Let me elaborate. All I see is a blank page. Making a basic page that works without JavaScript is not that hard.

Those things are inherently broken, especially when they're an extremely basic sign-up form.

and also, what do you think about the launchpage of my startup, which you can easily get there at http://binceipt.com

Same as above - get a native English-speaker (or if you have one, get a new one with more professional writing experience) to redo your copy.

Also clarify who your product is aimed at. Is this something I as a consumer sign-up for, or something that merchants sign up for and then provide to their customers? Of your eight reasons I should sign up, for of them are essentially the same thing ("you don't have to print anything") measured in different ways.

If it's merchant-focused (which I think it is), show an example of how to integrate with an existing POS system, and that you have a one-button pre-made system to do this. As an SBO, my core competency isn't programming against an API, and it isn't paying for a contractor do it do for me - it's selling stuff. If you want me to add this to my existing sales workflow, it needs to be beyond easy.

Add more detail about what exactly your product does, aside from provide electronic receipts. How do I make these receipts? Can I as a business owner customize them? What kind of reporting do I get? Similarly, add some screenshots/action shots. Right now the only meaningful bit is one screen of an iPhone app (I see nothing that you've customized on the iPad there), which is small, unclear, doesn't follow the Apple UX guidelines, and doesn't have the same look-and-feel of most other iPhone apps I have.

Once you've done all that and convinced me that I'd like to sign up, make it easier to do so. From the main login page, I have to find a link in the Bootstrap header (which has low contrast against its backdrop, then click a tab, and then enter my information.

From what I can tell, it's not responsive.

Who pays for coupons?

Your sign-up form shouldn't accept "test@example.com" as a valid address: No valid MX DNS RR.

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