No specific critique here other than "it was written by an LLM and this seems worth pointing out given that LLMs are bad at actually understanding difficult mathematics".

(In a different comment I make some actual criticisms of what you wrote. I see you replied to my comment there, and that's a more appropriate place to discuss actual ideas. I don't see much point in criticizing LLM output in a field LLMs are bad at.)

Anyway: (1) no, it wasn't clear. I wouldn't generally take "I nerd-sniped myself. Here's a more fleshed-out sketch of ..." to mean "Here's something written for me by an LLM". I'd take it to imply that the person had done the fleshing-out themself. And (2) no, the problem wasn't that you used words I don't understand. It's certainly possible that your ideas are excellent and I just don't understand them, but I'm a mathematician myself and none of the words scare me.