I agree that my dismissal was shallow. Oops, my bad. In contrast, your comments were clear and concise. I think my inclination towards criticism sprang out of the flowery and obscure prose the author used to make his points. I would wish the original author had been as clear, concise and to the point as you are. As other commenters have said, some of the sentences leave my brain swirling with "what is this man trying to say, I have no idea?"