The deck is visually good. The kiss fan club anecdote is great.
The following conclusions I drew from the deck are probably false, but I convey them because most investors skim through once with a skeptical eye and could reach similar conclusions.
- The first time through the deck I thought you'd already built the product, so I was looking for the adoption ramp.
- When I finally figured out that you haven't built it, I looked at the timeline and cant tell whether the two of you talking is the only event to take place before raising the seed.
- Then I looked at your bios, and thought that you guys must not have jobs right now which is the real reason for needing a seed.
I don't mean to be negative, I'm just telling you what went through my mind as I read it.
One last note: "advertising reach" is the wrong term to use because it couldn't be 23B without some mad hyperspace technology and the existence of alien empires. I spent years working with ad guys and they get bent out of shape when terms get used loosely.
I say, just build it. You didn't starve in the past 6 months so you're unlikely to starve in the next 6 months. You may be able to build it more easily than raise money.