A savvy audience (e.g., Peter Thiel) will remember the Everest deck. In fact, I've heard it discussed in several circles over the past few months. Going with what works is generally a smart approach, but you don't want to look like a carbon copy/an also ran. This is why I bring up the question of originality and suggest you add a bit more of your team's personality to the deck.

Otherwise, it's a great start. My two cents.