TL;DR as a service?

here's a coaching service (which, of course, costs money):

http://www.aliventures.com/coaching/

i found that one by googling for "writer coaching service -resume" (the last piece gets rid of the plethora of people who will only help you write a better resume).

have you studied Strunk's "Elements of Style"? well worth it if you have not. cheaper, too.