It is better now, but amusingly - "The other guy is not as well as you, but better with bowling.", in this case it should be "The other guy is not as good as you".
Great article, though.
Great article, though.
Also, props on how strong and well written the English is in general!
And, most importantly, loved the article. :)
(I thought this whole thread was a good example of how to actually do good feedback. )