To address your criticism: To be relatable poetry must be cliched, as it is about the human experience. That is as cliche as it gets: it is about things everyone knows.
You can still like whatever poetry you like, I'm just telling you personal reaction. And even though I use some pretty loaded words like "trivial/banal", it's just how I'd describe my reaction. Not meant to be authoritative.
These lines by GPT3:
Let us go, through half-forgotten doorways,
To places we have never been before.
Let us explore the unknown, and find our way
To a place of peace and joy, and never stray.
Let us find a place of solace, and stay
Where we can be ourselves, and never fear.
Now this:
and find our way
To a place of peace and joy, and never stray.
Let us find a place of solace, and stay
Where we can be ourselves, and never fear.
The rest of the poem just goes on in the same vein. Culminating in:
Let us find a place of contentment, and be
Forever happy, and never leave.
As to your point:
To address your criticism: To be relatable poetry must be cliched, as it is about the human
experience. That is as cliche as it gets: it is about things everyone knows.
This is the original poem:
https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poetrymagazine/poems/44212/...
Tell me how you think it compares.
The poem you linked seems very novel. I did not expect most of the wording, but it also did not make me feel anything. This is not a criticism, it is like that for all poetry I've ever read.
I suppose poetry is like all other media. I do enjoy books, shows and music. There the evaluation is much the same. It's about being novel and arriving at a point that is surprising, while not being contrived (e.g. if you could not possibly have figured out what happened given the priors). That does help me frame it. Thanks again :)
In a way I find poetry much more similar to music than to literature in the effect it has and how I perceive it.
Just wanted to add this reading of that poem. I find it brings it to life more. Not saying it's going to make you like it, but I think it can be more effective than just reading it. (Some would very much disagree with that though... including Eliot I think :D )