Dont mean to pile on (still better to write than not, glad it was linked, etc!) but I agree. It reads as language-fetishizing to me, too in love with little turns of phrase and eddies in the current. Noticed the same thing in Bo Burnham's Inside (lots of attention placed on aesthetic details), maybe it's a consequence of doing it all solo.

The older I get the more I admire people who are straightforward and cut through the gloss. If something is worth saying, it's worth saying simply.