So I timed.
5: 'corky'? WTF.
14: I wanna go to paris.
20: what's this do for me?
SUGGESTIONS:
- 'corky way to plan a trip' -- Its corny. Its bad. It doesnt make sense. "Plan a better trip" would be better.
- make it flow right. it doesn't fit right on a small screen. http://i.imgur.com/W5GJN.png is how it looks on a netbook sized screen.
- Assume your users dont know where they're going.
- Put everything above the 900px fold. Most important first.
- your features are NOT the most important.
Look at Hipmunk: On their front page, you are asked the four pertinant questions (To, From, When {leaving,returning}). Your app tries to sell itself before a user has ever tried it.
Better layout idea:
"Duffel: A better way to plan"
Where are you going: [________________________] When? [xx/xx/xx]
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edit: this page is stashed in a corner. Let it sell the app: http://duffelup.com/featured