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3 pointsjeggers522 comments

"Stop giving your Email Address to random people - but still be in the loop."

I was going to comment on your choice of copy text, then I refreshed the page to get another look and you had changed it to:

"Stay in the Loop without giving your Email to random People."

Much better. Why not make it more succinct? "Stay in the loop without giving away your email address" or even better: "Spread helps you stay in the loop without needing to share an email address". Tells visitors what you're doing, makes them ask "How" and it's direct copy.

Also, stop with the random capitalization, please?

+1 for giving me great feedback :) ye that was @AwesomeTogether's idea.

Capitalization is fixed, thanks :)

Great work, good luck on your launch! :)

Thanks, updated the copy again with your suggestion :)

The grammar on this page is terrible - "I'm Keeping a big Secret" - what's with the inconsistent capitalization?

This page leaves me more confused and frustrated than anything - what is your app? Why would I want to follow it on Twitter?

If you're keeping your app secret, you either shouldn't have a splash page, or should have a placeholder page with a quick sentence - even if it's just "Spread is going to revolutionize the way you share your ideas.", or something like that. As it stands, all I know is that Spread's splash page creators don't write very well.

+1 for the detailed comment, thanks. Fixed the grammar and am working on some copy to replace the current text, thanks :) also, if you couldn't see the button and logo earlier, it should be fixed now if you want to take a second look, thanks :)

Ok, I've changed it around a bit, thoughts?

It's much clearer, but I'm a bit confused - does "Stay in the loop without having to share an email address" explain what your app will do, or is it just your way of saying "hey, follow us on Twitter"? I'm expecting that sentence to be your service's pitch.

Yep, that's explaining what the App does. I'll make that a little clearer now, thanks :)

"stay in the loop without giving your email to random people"

better, imho

+1 for good idea :) Just changed it there, thanks a lot :)

np, i also think it's better to say

"Follow us on Twitter to get early access"

changed it to that, thanks :)

doesn't inspire me to want to follow you on twitter.

i don't like teasers with no info.

Good point. I'd rather work on the actual product though instead of spending ages on the splash page. Thanks for your comment.

At least give your Twitter url...

That's what the button's for!

I can't see a button under Safari 5 or Chrome 12: http://d.pr/L7ln

Ok, that should be fixed now, can you confirm? Thanks for your help.

Button background still isn't appearing for me.

no button- latest chrome for mac.

found the problem, it's fixed now. for real this time :P

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