A structure like this might make sense for a shorter mission - but considering the thought experiment asks what structure would be suitable for a long term Musk-style settlement I don't think thin ETFE would be enough.
At least part of the radiation risk is temporary solar events, so perhaps you could use a slightly hardened version of ETFE as the author suggests but keep all human activity near regularly placed deep shelters to retreat to when radiation spikes are detected?
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