The title is fine, and reflects the factual subtitle immediately below the headline. There is no requirement to post the article headline as-is on HN.
> There is no requirement to post the article headline as-is on HN.
There is. From the guidelines:
> Otherwise [i.e. not excessive clickbait] please use the original title, unless it is misleading or linkbait; don't editorialize.
It's a title, not a series of facts