Reluctant Self-Promotion
tylerkieft.com
tylerkieft.com
"Hi, I’m Tyler. Loved computers from an early age and have been coding since the 4th grade. Internships include helping IBM, develop an automation system written in Python, and a real-time wafer data mapping program written in Java and Python. Graduating from the University of Rochester, I wrote a personal power meter. Working with Matt on SpeakerText for over a year, and I’m pretty proud of our latest version, which was built from scratch in three months by three developers."
Also, what is the point of the promotion, to generate interest in yourself or generate interest in the company you work for?
Having taken a look at SpeakerText I'd suggest something like the following.
"Hi I'm Tyler, As a computer genius, having programmed since 4th grade, interned at IBM creating data mapping systems for nanoscale technologies, created grass roots green technology at the University of Rochester. I've teamed up with Matt from SpeakerText to create a system that helps you make more money from videos on your website, would you like to know how to make more money from videos on your website?"
Then describe the steps, ask them if it sounds like a lot of work, then pitch your product that will do the work for them for the low low price of $X.99 a month.
It's as simple as following AIDA, (Attention Interest Decision Action)
Attention (Hi I'm Tyler, im a computer/nanotech/green genius)
Interest (i can make you more money)
Decision (want to make more money?)
Action (sign up for speaker text)
I don't think that removing "I" from a sentence improves the sentence if "I" is still implied and the sentence just becomes ungrammatical. I tried to imagine someone speaking like that and it sounded like they were just making a list. I think that your point is good, but your example is harder on the ears than the original.
I think that that applies to this as well. You only have a few moments to really capture someone's attention these days and you have to use every gun in your arsenal. Techies (like myself) tend to downplay or outright denigrate marketing and sales tactics, but there is a lot of truth to them that we would do well to follow. Sure there are some slimy tactics out there, but polishing your elevator pitch (e.g. option #2 in the article) is essential.
referenced: http://www.bothsidesofthetable.com/2010/10/06/the-four-main-...
I also like succinct and colloquial: "Hi, I'm Tyler. I'm a co-founder of SpeakerText, and am in charge of the all the Tech. [Explanation of SpeakerText as appropriate]."
Of course, this depends on your audience. But all the examples you give seem to concentrate too much on you, and not enough on the product or the customer.
If they ask why you went to Rochester, you can tell them that you chose it over Harvard. If they ask about your outside interests, you can tell them those instead. If they ask you how you got involved, etc.
Obviously, some circumstances, such as introductions on a speakers' panel, demand a different approach. But if you are playing the role of Tech Lead, I think you are better off being confident with less than blustering.
I would recommend #2, the "Harvard" version.
(I ask because we are discussing EXACTLY the same thing at the moment, only with Stanford instead of Harvard :-)
If something really matters to you, you should be able to put your ego aside. When good things happen, you should be grateful, humble, and modest. Don't seek out or ask for promotions or raises; just do great stuff and you'll get recognized.
Sound advice.