"Hi, I'm Zenify - The first mindfulness and focus training bot for Telegram ️ Would you like to learn more about me or you'd prefer to start right away?"
I have no idea why I'd want this.
"Learn more"
"Which of the below would you like to see?"
I have no idea why I'd want this. I can't ask that question, I'll try the closest one.
"How does it work?"
(huge paragraph of text)
Still no idea why I'd want this. Also it's frustratingly slow and I'd definitely bounce on the first cutesy typing animation under any other circumstances.
Your old landing page leads with that same paragraph, but then it answers my question after that. Though it's super confusing because it says "Zenify helps you build the tools..." so maybe it's for making my own meditation things? Since you give examples later I'm guessing that's not the case.
I think the biggest problem is you're selling 2 different things - the old landing page doesn't mention Telegram at all, and the new one leads with Telegram then just goes to the wall of text from the old one that doesn't mention it.
Also your new landing page has referral links to two other services which for some reason get shown before your bot says anything, which feels a bit weird and confused.