Ask HN: What do you think of my landing page copy?
What would you change or what do you think needs more clarification? Thank you!
https://bootstrapcreative.com/shop/bootstrap-quick-start/
https://bootstrapcreative.com/shop/bootstrap-quick-start/
"What will I learn section" - this line bothers me - Learn what is responsive web design and the history behind it and how Bootstrap framework makes it easier. Maybe change it to "Learn what responsive web design is, the history behind it, and how Bootstrap framework makes it easier to implement."
I feel all the points in that list should end in a period - they sound like complete thoughts.
"And since the book and reference guides are hyperlinked PDF files and not videos, you can save them on your computer (no DRM) and even read offline if you need to."
Maybe change that to "And since the book and reference guides are hyperlinked PDF files and not videos, you can save them to your computer (DRM free) and access them at any time." but that might be picking nits - I just don't like the word "even" in the sentence.
The pricing at the bottom - starter, pro, design - I might put that into a panel or table and line up each point horizontally. Looks very freeform and again, is hard to see how each package compares to each other and read horizontally.
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part of one of the ebooks that someone can download for an email address or something.
https://bootstrapcreative.com/shop/bootstrap-quick-start/#sa...
https://bootstrapcreative.com/shop/bootstrap-quick-start/#re... (sneak preview link)
At what point of the page would you expect to see a free sample offered?