Hey, Shawn here - I'm a relatively new writer and I would really appreciate knowing what you think of my first essay. I enjoy improving myself, so feel free to point out style clumsiness, grammar errors, anything that generally sounds silly, and of course give your opinion of the actual content. I'm still an inexperienced software engineer (I've been programming for about eight years now) and this essay is based on what I have observed.
I hope the essay is somewhat enjoyable. Thank you.