I hate to see fiction encouraging a deterministic model.

I know I may get downvoted for this "me-too" comment, but just wanted to let you know that I was very happy to see both of your comments, as I share your sentiment exactly. This entire story is impossible, but many readers, not knowing much about QM might walk away thinking it's "plausible" due to their ignorance and the way the story is presented. Which isn't to say that's a bad thing on its own, but then they walk up to me and badger me with this bullshit... :-p