Is it me, or does this writer, use far, far too many, commas?
Seriously, once you look for it, you see it very clearly. You can usually spot Italians writing in English for their overuse of "the", their sentence length, and a higher frequency of passive verbs. If it feels like that but the number of "the"s is correct, the only explanation is that you are reading Ian McEwan.
Also, I didn't notice anything off while reading the post.
It could definitely be influence from the Italian language.